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Undying Love of a Broken Heart by ~Araym:iconAraym:



My chest burns like acid,
Slowly eating its way through my heat.
The puncture of billions of tiny needles,
As oily blood spilling forth, quickly catching flame.

The gases that are generated are not ever seen
As the blood deftly turns back into my dreams.
For it is not really as it seems,
As the pain is all that can be.

You caused the pain
And now you see the power you hold over me.
But was it truly worth it when you chose to hurt me?

What could have made you so mad
That you would rip the life from me?
Did I truly do anything bad, or was it you who turned bad on me?

The pain and fear makes me shake,
Like a million people in an earthquake,
With the burning force of erupting volcano,
This burning, aching fear consumes all.

Yet,
The burning and quaking only stop by the undying love of a broken heart.
©2004-2009 ~Araym
:iconaraym:

Author's Comments

This something I wrote while I was bored on a college visit that I am still on. Well, it is not pretty or funny but I hope you all will enjoy it.

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:iconmikit-yorinao:
. . . I like the ending.

The gases that are generated

I think that line could have been worded better. It bothers me for some reason.
:iconosmeon:
As oily blood spilling forth, quickly catching flame.. maybe catches?

you would ripe the life? Rip?

I like the million people in an earthquake line. Goes well with the one before it. =D

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Sometimes I lie awake at night, and I ask, "Where have I gone wrong?" Then a voice says to me, "This is going to take more than one night."

~Charles M. Schulz~
:iconaraym:
So far your the only one to notice the ripe thing, hehehe. Almost got away with it. Darn, I was found out. Well, thanks for the input.
:iconosmeon:
I caught you. :evillaugh:

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Sometimes I lie awake at night, and I ask, "Where have I gone wrong?" Then a voice says to me, "This is going to take more than one night."

~Charles M. Schulz~
:iconpetroleumjelly:
Hrm, I wonder how I ever missed this piece until now? I must have deleted it from my messages when I was gone for awhile, and deviations piled up. Hmm.

Anyhow, interesting piece. I always find it weird reading your pieces, because they are often all too different from mine. Great imagery, and I agree that the million people in an earthquake was definitely one of those lines that catches the eye. And change that ripe already! =D

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